Re:Blog Stage Seven

To the work entitled Blog Stage Seven

The blog posed some very interesting questions. I want to first share my respect for you as a fellow witter and , and apologize if any thing written offends or angers you. My comments are not those of a professional or written to bash your ideas, they are simply suggestions to amplify your ideas about a topic and the connection the your readers.
First, a title for your work(a little something more than Blog Stage Seven) would be most fitting. A coherent title will help your readers follow and understand your view on a specific topic more facilely. I noticed while reading your blog you really discuss three topics; "...unemployment should be bottoming.", "blame the American people", and"...unfair Credit Card practices." To help the reader clearly understand the proposition you are opposing or supporting , it is best in my opinion to focus on just one solid topic, supplying sufficient details and information that engage your reader. Again, a title somewhat referencing what you intend to argue may allow you to address different topics and help the reader follow along more efficiently. Separating your topic in paragraphs might also help the reader follow your writing more efficiently. By separating topics, and giving background information on your next topic in previous paragraphs, the reader will have a better knowledge of the topics discussed.
At various points in your blog you make statements like "You shoot blanks when aiming at Republicans or Democrats,...",when you do this assume the reader has no clue of what has just been stated. Make sure you give your readers a detailed explanation or example of your statement. When you are referencing to an article you have read ,"there was an article in the USA Today ...", give an embedded link that readers can follow so they may also formulate their own ideas.
The rest of my comments apply to small and very minute things that can be fixed with the blink of an eye. When writing anything if you can always have someone look over your work. As authors we have predetermined how our ides are written on paper. We are liable to miss things like spelling or punctuation. Instead of "boston.com" try The "Boston Globe" (the printed source of boston.com.) In the second sentence of your blog you discuss your attitude towards "the poll" but do not give the reader any background information other than the poll is about "Economy". Even though you have provided a link to the article , lets face it some readers just aren`t going to take the time to read it. For readers like this background information is curial for forming views and knowledge of the topic of which you are discussing. Last but not least are the very few punctuation problems in your writing."Economy" should be economy (lower case) , "there" should be There (capital t),and "Credit Card" should be in lower case letters.Overall your blog is both interesting and intriguing;the only real problem is a lack of substantial information.